I feel like the bit of my skirt in the corner is too distracting.
I feel like he looks dead and not serene.
I remember browns and yellows and peaches and oranges, but I don't know where, and I wouldn't know how to incorporate them.
I don't like the pattern on the skirt. I decided to try and do it from memory instead of getting it out and looking at it, but the dots and the big triangles don't feel right at all.
I've definitely taken a beautiful memory and started to really destroy it. It's grey and sad and dead now, not warm and inviting. I feel like trying again. But the more you prod at a memory the fainter it gets.
I had been planning on doing a series on my memories of this person, but I don't want to do any more damage.
I invite comments and criticism. At this point I definitely see this as a failed piece.